on stage

Posted: 05/27/2012 in house of love, house of women

lived half my life on stage, babe.

sang hard,

never cared

if they found me fine or horrible;

but i’m scared undressing for you

til you softly say,

“sometimes you’re shy…

it’s adorable.”

_____

a poem in 33 words for trifecta 18

 

 

 

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Comments
  1. hedgewitch says:

    The distillation of our inner selves–it’s often hard to open that bottle, but a little understanding will pop the cork. Not a wasted word here.

  2. Shawna says:

    I stamp you the winner; I don’t have to read any others. Lines 5 and 7 are phenomenal and make the whole poem. Excellent capture of the true spirit of “the life of the party.”

  3. Libby says:

    This is really good! People are complicated, and I think you have really nailed that…

  4. So sweet beneath the rough. Nice job.
    Came from Trifextra.

  5. it’s easy to put on an air amongst thousands you do not know, but when it comes to those close at heart, the opinion matters and we want to be our true selves

  6. lolamouse says:

    Inner and outer selves can be so different. You capture that in so few words. We feel truly loved when someone speaks to our inner self.

  7. k~ says:

    Simply put… I like it.

  8. Tara R. says:

    Even the hardest people feel vulnerable sometimes. This was sweet.

  9. The real self and the staged one – Perfectly portrayed here.

  10. gene3067 says:

    The stage is a persona, the undressed man is a person. Well done. 🙂

  11. barbara says:

    sweet, indeed 🙂

  12. Lucy says:

    Your words really hit me. Excellent.

  13. I’ve never been onstage, but I could really relate to the undressing part. Not easy for a person with self-image problems.
    K

  14. Even someone famous has moments of anxiety. I like that.

  15. Trifecta says:

    Thank you so much for linking up to Trifextra this weekend. The challenge this weekend will be judged by the community. So please come back to the Trifecta home page and click the stars next to the three posts you most enjoyed. You only have until Monday at 8 am EST, so hurry!

  16. Lucy Miller Robinson says:

    I love the dual-sided narrator, the confidence of a performer paired with the vulnerability of someone in love.

  17. dani says:

    wow! this says so much! lovin’ it!!!

    {who knew Ms Black could be so tender and shy?}

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