if an angel whispers
love will come
despite what it’s done before,
hire the devil to black the stars
so she don’t come back no more.
if that same angel
whispers again
sweetly your hope to wake,
smile and nod like a lady should–
then drown that bitch in the lake.
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for dverse poetry
Coal Black's House Of Pain 
Yes indeed…I believe the term I might be seeking here is…..BRING IT! Never disappointed, and always inspired after visiting. You took the prompt of water…and soaked me first read! Did I mention I liked the FLOW as well 😉 Awesome!
whew… your post is awesome ~
like the imagery of this line ~ hire the devil to black the stars
and that last line kicks it ~
Remind me to try to stay on coal’s good side. This is exceptionally sharp and well written–just skewering the subject on a broken bottle of emotion. Excellent stuff.
so you want to black some stars for me coal…i give you the sharpies, even carry the cinderblocks…
Amazing poetry! You have left me inspired. So happy I ran across your blog! 🙂 xox
yessir… it’s important to act like a lady {at least when anyone’s looking.} brilliant take on the prompt! ♥
lol – this is great. the way it reads for me reminds me a bit of the “now I lay me down to sleep” prayer. I think it was the “sweetly your hope to wake” line. totally enjoyed this. thanks!
haha…only if it’s false hope, but then we don’t always know the difference…ouch! Brilliant write! 🙂
Yep. ‘Cause that angel is pure booze, or can be — fool’s gold with mermaid hooters. This is the perfect shadow of my post today, the witch half of the lady in the lake. Eros was not a kind visitor to the Greeks who first wrote love poems down — a possessor, a puncturer of self’s definition, a wind which takes one’s breath away and leaves them robbed of soul. He warn’t no rock n roll show.
Whoa!
A wicked tag line! what a kicker…this is twisted and nasty….perfecto!
The voice of the burned twice, thrice, or more. So sad, and yet, so deliciously true – “drown that bitch in the lake,” a hell of a kick line!! Amy
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Oooooh – very good! I can hear this one put to music. Careful though, even if you drown the bitch you still may not be safe!
I’m all for drowning bitches in the lake!
Last line is hilarious