Posted: 07/30/2011 in house of crazy, house of love, house of women

if an angel whispers

love will come

despite what it’s done before,

hire the devil to black the stars

so she don’t come back no more.

if that same angel

whispers again

sweetly your hope to wake,

smile and nod like a lady should–

then drown that bitch in the lake.



for dverse poetry

  1. tashtoo says:

    Yes indeed…I believe the term I might be seeking here is…..BRING IT! Never disappointed, and always inspired after visiting. You took the prompt of water…and soaked me first read! Did I mention I liked the FLOW as well 😉 Awesome!

  2. Heaven says:

    whew… your post is awesome ~

    like the imagery of this line ~ hire the devil to black the stars

    and that last line kicks it ~

  3. hedgewitch says:

    Remind me to try to stay on coal’s good side. This is exceptionally sharp and well written–just skewering the subject on a broken bottle of emotion. Excellent stuff.

  4. brian miller says:

    so you want to black some stars for me coal…i give you the sharpies, even carry the cinderblocks…

  5. Amazing poetry! You have left me inspired. So happy I ran across your blog! 🙂 xox

  6. dani says:

    yessir… it’s important to act like a lady {at least when anyone’s looking.} brilliant take on the prompt! ♥

  7. Sheila Moore says:

    lol – this is great. the way it reads for me reminds me a bit of the “now I lay me down to sleep” prayer. I think it was the “sweetly your hope to wake” line. totally enjoyed this. thanks!

  8. haha…only if it’s false hope, but then we don’t always know the difference…ouch! Brilliant write! 🙂

  9. Brendan says:

    Yep. ‘Cause that angel is pure booze, or can be — fool’s gold with mermaid hooters. This is the perfect shadow of my post today, the witch half of the lady in the lake. Eros was not a kind visitor to the Greeks who first wrote love poems down — a possessor, a puncturer of self’s definition, a wind which takes one’s breath away and leaves them robbed of soul. He warn’t no rock n roll show.

  10. Tom Eliot says:

    A wicked tag line! what a kicker…this is twisted and nasty….perfecto!

  11. The voice of the burned twice, thrice, or more. So sad, and yet, so deliciously true – “drown that bitch in the lake,” a hell of a kick line!! Amy

  12. Other Mary says:

    Oooooh – very good! I can hear this one put to music. Careful though, even if you drown the bitch you still may not be safe!

  13. lolamouse says:

    I’m all for drowning bitches in the lake!

  14. Poetic Soul says:

    Last line is hilarious

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