Posted: 06/01/2014 in house of change

lipsjohanna was a big girl,

my best friend back in seventy-something.

johanna was a funny girl,

could mimic anybody and crack me right up.

johanna had a nice mom–

“she thinks you come over to see her.”

johanna open and parse out the cold pills,

then bang a gong.

sleep well, johanna,

johanna so long.


for Flash 55 at Real Toads, hosted by the super superb Hedgewitch, and also for Mag 222.

  1. Kay Davies says:

    Sad about Johanna.
    I always loved Marianne Faithfull.

  2. Helen says:

    chilling … down to the bone

  3. ManicDdaily says:

    “Like” is not quite right. Very poignant tale_ you have the perfect inflection with the nice mom– the kind of jealousy there or something that isn’t fully working and great sadness with that so long. Much conveyed there. Thanks. K.

  4. Kathe W. says:

    ouch. Sad….especially for her Mom

  5. hedgewitch says:

    A lot of the good people, the ones with big hearts and open souls, didn’t make it. Not sure what that makes us, except survivors, I guess, and people who maybe learned a little of what they had to give before they took it away.

  6. This rings with truth – so many details packed into 55 words.

  7. CC Champagne says:

    There is such sadness in this… That invisible pain of being a teen, especially a big teen clown with a cool mum… Lost before she even knew life. Beautiful.

  8. This was sensual and sad at the same time – you created a wonderful tension in this poem – what a sad, sad ending to such a short life.

  9. grapeling says:

    damn. life snuffed. ~

  10. Steph says:

    Brought on tears… the last 2 lines are quite moving. So short, but so powerful.

  11. Susan says:

    Oh, oh. There’s an unforgettable loss of conversation, everything. One friend left me like this. I was so angry at him, but couldn’t help, and wasn’t asked to help, wasn’t allowed. I remember these words from Bob Dylan–cruel. Your short poem goes the distance.

  12. lolamouse says:

    Awsome. Love the Marianne Faithful too!

  13. Sioux says:

    Only 55 words? Wowzer!

  14. I’ve known this girl, over and over and over. The picture knocked the wind out of me. Marianne Faithfull, excellent choice. Why is it the life of the party often has the saddest habits? Hell, I’m one to ask. The only thing I didn’t do was the gong, and that was because somehow I knew it would be too good and too bad. The ending to this left tears in my eyes. Packed a wallop from beginning to end, brill. Peace, Amy

  15. AND IT WAS THE 55?! Damn, girl!

  16. This is just so sad.. the lightness of your worlds combined with the stark images.. the hint of a mother.. yes a lot to be read between your lines.. (just the type of writing I love)

  17. Miss Stacy says:

    ah, such lovely parts mixed with sadness. the essence of poetry, the bitter truth. love it!

    stacy lynn mar

  18. I agree with Miss Stacy. There is sadness, for the loss of a girl who could have a great life. And a bit of happiness because she was loved enough to receive a tribute…

  19. Mama Zen says:

    Damn, this is sad.

  20. How sad to lose a good friend.

  21. dani says:

    brilliant 55, SP!

  22. Tess Kincaid says:

    I can hear this set to music…

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