remember, girl

Posted: 09/25/2011 in house of change, house of love, house of women

i said, come on, girl,

i know where the bushes break and the

trees will let us in.

i know where the little creek runs,

we can be alone and then…

/

i said, dammit, girl,

they’re buildin’ houses

down near where we like to go…

down by the place that no one knows,

where my love and the little creek flow…

/

i said, remember, girl,

where we used to go? where i

brushed the hair from your eyes?

today i saw what they’ve done to it,

and i swear, my girl, i cried.

 

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Comments
  1. Mary says:

    Yup, so sad when houses are built on places that formerly were green and secluded and natural!

  2. Heaven says:

    It is sad when places and things that we remember are not what they used to be ~

    I enjoyed this ~

  3. hedgewitch says:

    Tight writing here– balanced between sentiment and cynicism and walking the fine middle line of realism and memory instead. Things change faster than we do so many times. I like the second stanza endline, and of course, the repetition, which makes this a perfect song lyric.

  4. dani says:

    love the repetition and the final verse really rocks! i have cried when seeing what has been done in the name of “progress.” great poem!

  5. Bodhirose says:

    Too many times “progress” has erased the physical landmarks of what we remember. There was something so easy and simple about this writing–very appealing.

  6. Mama Zen says:

    I hate when they pave paradise like that!

  7. love the tone and frequency – V nicely done

  8. “I know nothing stays the same”…some crazy weird thing is happening today. That song is playing as I type..Carly Simon. All the music seems to appropriately accompany the poems I’m reading today. These are the days when I feel plugged into the energy of the universe.

    Nothing does stay the same, for life and times change and we all beg for mercy, and wish we could lay that hour glass on its side…praying for infinity. Think your work might last that long, dear!

  9. Reflections says:

    In the area I live, we watch bit by bit as our valley of canyons and nature give way to house after house. Sad really.

  10. I can really relate to your poem. I have been away from America for a very long long time and now I am here for a little bit to see my Mom and Dad and nothing is the same as I remember it here. this place seems for different and does not seem happy and peaceful like it use to be. Very well done
    http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/09/24/loneliness-the-anger-of-lost-hope/

  11. brian says:

    not cool at all…not enough places to rendezvous these days, course now there are empty houses enough you know…

  12. lolamouse says:

    “They paved paradise and put up a parking lot.”

  13. Kathe W. says:

    we’re constantly having to watch what the developers are up to- so fristrating-we need our quiet green spaces. Well done!

  14. Anna Lefler says:

    Oh, this is beautiful.

    Love it.

    🙂 A.

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