Posted: 02/27/2011 in house of love, house of women

he left mama a goodbye note

all typed out

like somethin from the post-dispatch.

i heard him pickin out the keys

real careful–


tck tck


we lived upstairs then,

and mama, who’d been listenin all the while

growled,  jumped outta bed,

ran in there and threw that damn typewriter out the window.

it landed on his green buick,

right on the hood…

it stalled and he yelled up,

what’d you go and do that for?

while his engine went


tck tck


and he had to stay.

  1. brian miller says:

    farkin typewriter…just when i wanted to leave…

  2. I love this. Love the tck tck tck………I wrote for decades on an ancient Underwood with broken keys, a bottle of whiteout handy:)

  3. hedgewitch says:

    Sucks when mama gets wise to your bs. If he wasn’t so lazy, he could have thumbed a ride.

  4. Claudia says:

    agh… love how to tie this up with the last line – spectacular in it’s simpleness – and i too like the tck tck…

  5. Reflections says:

    Fantastic write… love the end, or the beginning of new days left untyped…

  6. Mattison says:

    A fantastic story told so simply. Love how the mother throws out the typewriter. Funny. Really great write!

  7. I’d have loved to see mama’s biceps..these things weighed a tonne! Lovely ditty, thanks for sharing!

    • coalblack says:

      tbh, i had forgotten how heavy they actually were, but i can remember now that you mention it. still, i know an angry woman can launch a typewriter out a window. Seen it done lol.

  8. signed .............bkm says:

    I love it…that is one way of keeping him home…bkm

  9. zouxzoux says:

    Good for mamma.

  10. jenneandrews says:

    funny– in my poem the typewriter goes out the window too. Great and strained and stained minds…xxxj

  11. wkkortas says:

    The casual, vernacular nature of this piece belies the craftsmanship here. This is clever, wickedly wry top-shelf stuff.

  12. Brendan says:

    You never can say goodbye. – Brendan

  13. Mama Zen says:

    Nice aim, Mama!

  14. Steve Isaak says:

    Great story-telling, line-breaks; wonderful use of brevity and ambiguity, blah blah blah. 🙂

  15. Jack says:

    The Royal demise of the Buick. Great writing!

  16. Mary says:

    You know, I think that is justice. Excellent ending.

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